Tips for Improving Writing Style 

• Prefer active voice most of the time.
• Prefer verbs over nominalizations  (better to decide than to "make a decision"). Powerpoint lecture on this.
• Emphasize the positive. ("I can do it Friday" is clearer than "I can't do it till Friday.")
• Keep subjects and verbs close together.
• Put the main idea in the sentence core (in the main subject and verb of the sentence).
  

Keep Subjects and Verbs Close Together

S&V Too Far Apart:
The method proposed in the guidance section of the report of using weather balloons will meet this requirement.

Revised:
Using weather balloons will meet this requirement.
(This also makes the main topic the subject of the sentence.)

Put the main idea in the sentence core

The main subject and verb of this sentence are "we feel"
After reviewing the research and in light of the relevant information found within the context of the conclusions, we feel that there is definite need for some additional research to more specifically pinpoint our advertising and marketing strategies.

Revised:
Our marketing research shows that we need more research to pinpoint our advertising and marketing strategies.